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Neon Apr 30, 2014 8:31:44 GMT 8

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Post by Midnight on Apr 30, 2014 8:31:44 GMT 8

Nickname:None
Age:3
Breed: Nature wolf

Pack:Zorro's pack

Daughter of female(Bluesilver)

Gender:Female

Position:Hunter

Coat Color:See group pic for example. Mostly black with red tipped ears,white under belly from her neck to under her tail,red tipped tail,blue on her face,two right blue paws,two red back paws.Blue on the top of her back.
Coat Pattern: see pic

Special Markings:See pic
Color of special markings:see pic

Element:mixed,but mostly darkness
Appearance:see pic

Element Symbol:fire
Element Symbol Color:flame
Element Symbol Location:under right front paw

Personality:Spunky, careing, (wil ad more as I roleplay her)
History:Neon was born in Zorro's pack.Her mother is Bluesilver. She has been taken advtange of by rouge wolves before and has lost a bit of her spunkiness ,advertrious self, she usually stays closer to the pack now a days rather then exploring and flirty with other wolves. She isn't shy,but she isn't talkative theses days either.
Flaws:Being spunky got her hurt.

Strengths:great hunters
Other Notes:adnormal eyes,of red,white,black,blue and red.

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Last Edit: May 1, 2014 23:14:19 GMT 8 by Midnight

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Neon Apr 30, 2014 10:17:19 GMT 8

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Post by vatisti on Apr 30, 2014 10:17:19 GMT 8

There's a few issues here that need to be resolved.

1. At the start you say you don't know who the mother is yet, but later you have the mother as BlueSilver. Honestly this is rather confusing for roleplaying.

2. We need you to have a definite position set for her, you say; "Position:Don't know at the moment maybe hunter" In order for the roleplaying to work, you have to choose one and stick with it unless it is changed through roleplay later on.

3. Being a text based RP, we need better description of her physical traits. The image only shows her head, and not her body, so please take that into consideration.

4. This isn't so much an issue, but did you intend to only have one personality trait listed? It's fine if that's so, but I thought it best to bring it up.

These are the only issues. When you edit your post, please let us know with a new post on this thread.

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Midnight Alpha Posts: 69 Health Points: 100	Neon May 1, 2014 23:15:14 GMT 8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Midnight on May 1, 2014 23:15:14 GMT 8 Fixed
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vatisti Administrator Posts: 19 Health Points: Indefinate Character Name: N/A Character Name: N/A Character Name: N/A	Neon May 2, 2014 0:03:06 GMT 8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by vatisti on May 2, 2014 0:03:06 GMT 8 Your character has been accepted, we hope you enjoy your time here!
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